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This was an amazing piece of writing. The dialogue was well thought out and the emotions present were truly palpable. I couldn't help but read the entire thing because it was just that gripping. This piece is realistic enough that the reader can put themselves in the shoes of Daniel and feel his emotions. I believe that regardless of how you decided to end it, it would still have been a wonderful piece of literature. I definitely think you should continue writing if you can keep up this quality of work. Once again, congratulations on a great work of literature.
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Cranberry413 Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012
Thank you so much for the lovely critique! I really appreciate you taking the time to write it :)
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